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Mein Gott im Himmel-
Where are You now?
Save me-
Help me.
Pull this trigger-slide this blade- tighten this rope- kill what You have made.
Make me bleed salvation from my eyes-
Make me scream towards the skies!
Mein Gott im Himmel-
Help me say my last goodbyes.

Take my soul
And make me whole.
Rape my faith; take my trust and throw it all away.
Take my life, prove me right- let them know it's all a waste.

Take my eyes so I may not see.
Take my ears so I may not hear.
Take my tongue so I may not speak.
Take my life so I may not breathe.

Mein Gott im Himmel-
Raise me up so I can fall.
Shove me up against Your judgemental wall.
Choke my life and make it all
Go away.
Dying and crippled
Completely scar riddled,
Dead and bleeding in Your Holy hand.
©2004-2009 *MakeShiftSoul
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Author's Comments

YEAH. I like this one. Irony of it all is, I wrote it during church....

but yes, COMMENT! >_< Teh Gothic Jesus/Wench/Bitch Godess Shannon commands you!

-=[Edit]=-
May 22, 2005.

Just fixing some things; image taken from google.

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:iconphoenixrose32:
omfg! AWESOME!!!!!!!! :+fav:

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Love to one, friendship to many, goodwill to all.


WE :heart: °jark!!
:iconmakeshiftsoul:
:blushes: oh stop it...

just kidding, keep going! :rofl:

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:iconwinguardm-leviosa:
fcuking awesome!!! *fave*
:iconmakeshiftsoul:
:blushes:

thank you so much!

This is one I'm actually insanely proud of :XD:

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:iconwinguardm-leviosa:
you are very welcome!! ;P you have the right to be insanely proud....very good stuff =)
:iconjacquelynann:
i like this although i am unsure exactly what it is about . Is it aobut the constant verbal bashing taht people who proclaim their beliefs receive for the crime of having faith or is it something deeper.

I also like th egerman in it although to me it adds humour :wtf: because we aussies use 'mein gott' when someone tell us something they think is exciting and just isn't LOL

But i like the style here its original and refreshing.

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"Restlessness is always driving me, and i cannot help it" - Charles Dickens.
:iconmakeshiftsoul:
Everyone has their own views on what it's about. Some believe it to be someone calling out to God, wondering where he is, some believe it to be (like you said) the verbal bashing of their beliefs...I DON'T like to have constricted, set out 'laws' if you will for what my poetry means. I like the reader to take it however he or she pleases, unless I state "this poem is about _____" and I fill in the blanks.

I added the german because I'm taking it in school and just thought it sounded neat and would freshen it up a bit.

Thanks :)

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:iconjacquelynann:
Yes i understand. YOu know how you go to english and your like "What are we doing today sir?"

and then they pull out a poem and your like :stab: :chainsaw: oh we are murdering another persons poem are we?

LOL

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"Restlessness is always driving me, and i cannot help it" - Charles Dickens.
:iconmakeshiftsoul:
YES!

I absolutely HATE that! It's like- let's pick this poem to absolute fucking bits so any comprehension of it whatsoever is lost and forsaken. Let's take this poor persons' poem about Spring and make it turn into how it's all about when after all the people have died in the war, the war is slowly ending or some other bullshit thing like that. >_<

Ok I'm done ranting :P

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